(my first story on bp) Trying not to drown. (Plz read its great)

This is a story about a girl named Sarah who who would do anything for her little sister Mia.

Chapter one:
I woke up I looked in my sisters room to see my sister not there. I tiptoed to my parents room. There was Mia.
Curled between my mom and dad, are dog, Maxwell, at guard. Mia face was red. She must have been crying. A nightmare probably. She was 5, i was 13. I loved my sister like nothing else mattered. I walked here to school every day. Not caring i might be late for class.

It was the weekend. The sky was gray, the ground wet. I just waited down stairs for some one to wake up. I hear a cry. I go to my parents room. My parents waking and Mia crying. I sit on the bed."Shh"
"Sarah! Monster took me way! And he gots all mad a-and ate me!" Mia whined. "Its ok. No monsters now. Everything is ok... calm down."
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